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Tyr-Ziu Saxnot
08-02-2015, 12:26 PM
I started this poem three years ago, hit a roadblock and left it because the dream that inspired it vanished from my mind. Just recently found it again and decided to edit the original wasting away fragment and then finish it .
This poem is not my usual strict rhyming style but its important for several other reasons- first is the message, second is its original inspiration and last but not least is the recent inspiration that sent me back to it!
Hell, I had to search my entire library(a long, hard task) and then finally found it in a ammo box in my gun case!
Which is in my library as I knew that I had left it there but had forgotten exactly where !
Please note-This is not my usual rhyming form and thus I have no adequate way to properly measure how good it is or else is not.
Other than my gut feeling is that it is fairly good. This poem has taken longer to write than any other poem I've ever written.
Here is the results below.... hope you may enjoy...-Tyr
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The Rage,The Destruction And Miracle Of The Light

The world shook,great and mighty waters then parted,
forests smashed,caves imploded,mountains were broken,
sky cracked,moon flew away,he laughed as earth cried
yet this fearsome dark God's anger did not subside!

He spoke,then seas started boiling,huge clouds exploding,
rocks moaning in saddened wails,Nature begging,
trees falling,mud baking,and fish cooked in solid ice,
yet still his hard,raging heart was in a massive rage !

He filled rivers with red blood,wishes with sharp thorns,
hopes with most intensive agony,hearts with lead ,
a curse upon innocent living and the long sleeping dead,
and still hate filled his riping,seething mighty mind!

Next he ate the meadows,spit on the world's beauty,
stomped the valleys,tore the pained world asunder,
Savaged the creatures,burnt the dreams,stabbed love,
defeated the imagination and killed the happy songs!

Still,no mercy filled his hate-filled and icy veins,
he kicked the unborn innocence,let loose the darkness,
blasted and burnt the weak and slaughtered the brave,
and still much more he hatefully dared to now do!

Halt Dark One! This I,command you must now start to obey!

Then,out boomed this mightier voice with righteous anger,
light spread across the weeping world,forests regrew,
seas reborn and dark skies awoke to clear sunny days,
rocks reformed,meadows soon appeared,songs now heard!

Hope was given its holy miracles back,love was restored,
mountains reformed,fish restocked,valleys replenished,
people inspired with love and faith,moon swiftly returned,
hearts were reborn,imagination given a new deeper birth!

Thus said this God of Light,- darkness now flee far away,
return only when I give thee that needed brief respite,
I the Master of Light,will hold sacred this great holy day,
EARTH PROSPERS AND HATE,YOUR DARK POWER I NOW SLAY!

Robert J. Lindley, 08-02-2015

Note-- I left this poem to sit unfinished 3 long years, only to return this
morning to finish it

Tyr-Ziu Saxnot
08-02-2015, 12:58 PM
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Syllables Per Line: 12 13 12 12 0 14 11 13 13 0 12 12 15 12 0 12 11 11 15
Total # Syllables: 200
Total # Lines: 19 (Including empty lines)
Words with (syllables) counted programmatically: N/A
Total # Words: 127
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2.

Syllables Per Line: 12 14 11 12 0 14 0 13 12 14 12 0 15 14 13 16 0 13 14 16 12
Total # Syllables: 227
Total # Lines: 21 (Including empty lines)
Words with (syllables) counted programmatically: hateyour (2), <-- Syllables counted programmatically for these words.
Total # Words: 147

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See results shown above are the original . Exactly as they hit my computer screen.
In second part, EXACTLY where it usually posts *N/A* as it did in the first part
counted I got the post (** hateyour (2),**) !!!

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Now I ask this --

How strange is this! See below what popped into my counting the syllables in the second half
of my recently posted long poem!
How can this be? See the middle phrase thrown in there. -- ( ** hateyour (2),**)
I had bookmarked each section before running thru the poetry site's syllable counter
I had not typed anywhere the words- "hateyour" (2)!
Yet when running part 2 for its syllable count it gave me this as shown!
Can any person really up on computers explain how this can be?
Is it possible that bookmarked posts can be read and replied to in such a manner!??

Syllables Per Line: 12 14 11 12 0 14 0 13 12 14 12 0 15 14 13 16 0 13 14 16 12
Total # Syllables: 227
Total # Lines: 21 (Including empty lines)
Words with (syllables) counted programmatically: hateyour (2), <-- Syllables counted programmatically for these words.
Total # Words: 147