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Bilgerat
12-10-2019, 02:35 PM
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Tyr-Ziu Saxnot
12-10-2019, 03:56 PM
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I just may take up this invitation.
If time allows, I am busy collaboration with 4 poets as of now, still trying to finish up over 200 poem fragments
from many decades ago, working on another famous poets dedication series and doing all of my regular family chores and honey-do's each day..
Thanks my friend for the notice!! --Tyr

Abbey Marie
12-10-2019, 06:02 PM
You should squeeze this in, Tyr. It fits so well with your Viking persona.

Tyr-Ziu Saxnot
12-10-2019, 09:09 PM
You should squeeze this in, Tyr. It fits so well with your Viking persona.

Thanks Abbey. And also flows in well with my recent tribute to Coleridge and his, world famous and truly magnificent poem, "The Rime Of The Ancient Mariner" that I used as inspiration to write my dedication poem to him and his golden poetry.
Still time is a factor, but may well decide to do so tomorrow if I have the spark that sets my pen to itching to sling ink..--Tyr

Tyr-Ziu Saxnot
12-11-2019, 09:35 AM
Like Razor Sharp Sword, Cutting Through Butter

Like razor sharp sword, cutting through butter.
Flows, American Coast Guard ice cutter.

Like razor sharp sword cutting through butter
Flows American Coast Guard ice cutter
In seas of ice, frozen hard as concrete
Its valiant crew accepting no defeats
Winds across glassy smooth ice does its dance
Ship and brave crew leaving nothing to chance
Watching as ice breaks, tumbles from its prow
Never fearful of Neptune's angry scowl
They work diligently around the clock
Far away, from safety of their home dock.

Like razor sharp sword, cutting through butter.
Flows, American Coast Guard ice cutter.

Beast, cutter rips through diamond hard ice
American made, prow designed to slice
Manned by courageous men, well trained and true
Born to sea duty, earning their just due
There to face coldest cold of freezing clime
Diligent in their ship's pride, all the time
Sworn to defend life, American shores
Face dangers, living life that never bores
As ice buckles and breaks in popping tune
Crew often longs for warmth of sunny June.

Like razor sharp sword, cutting through butter.
Flows, American Coast Guard ice cutter.

Robert J. Lindley, 12-11-2019,
Rhyme, ( Dedicated To Brave American Coast Guard That Honorably Serves This Nation )

Note: I woke this morn and my muse said, boy go ahead and write.
I will give you help as you so often need it! Remember, without me
you'd still be barefoot gathering eggs for breakfast and slaving on
the damn farm. After a scowl and some thought, I saw some bit
of merit, some small bit of truth in that, her usual condemning tirade
and I began to compose. As usual she did finally give me two verses
and another enlightened admonishment that I was getting old, and
very, very lazy as well as a bit boring to her. With such immense help
and joyful cheering-- just how could I go wrong I ask !??

Syllables Per Line:
0 10 10
0 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10
0 10 10
0 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10 10
0 10 10
Total # Syllables:260
Total # Words:::::184

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Hoping for any constructive criticism/help that any may care to give on this piece.
As it is a raw first draft.... TIA...... --Tyr

Abbey Marie
12-11-2019, 11:55 AM
Fantastic! They were I believe going for metaphor, but your realism was actually more engaging to me.

I wonder if you could offer it to the USCG?

Tyr-Ziu Saxnot
12-11-2019, 01:54 PM
Fantastic! They were I believe going for metaphor, but your realism was actually more engaging to me.

I wonder if you could offer it to the USCG?

I know what was called for but realism is my primary way of writing-even when it is fantasy, mythology, imagination, fable, dreaming and or any of form/theme, etc...
I already sent it in as is.
If they do not like it , matters not to me, my muse gave a nod and her approval means everything to me,
despite her usual nasty disposition and love of berating me into submission when she can.
Reality, duty, danger, dedication, depth and purpose are all in the piece--if that is not enough --tuff, says an old too oft jaded poet
such as I.. Besides anybody can write loads of metaphors and call it poetry.
I am no cookie cutter poet my friend. I follow my own path despite its oft high costs. --Tyr

Bilgerat
12-11-2019, 02:17 PM
I know what was called for but realism is my primary way of writing-even when it is fantasy, mythology, imagination, fable, dreaming and or any of form/theme, etc...
I already sent it in as is.
If they do not like it , matters not to me, my muse gave a nod and her approval means everything to me,
despite her usual nasty disposition and love of berating me into submission when she can.
Reality, duty, danger, dedication, depth and purpose are all in the piece--if that is not enough --tuff, says an old too oft jaded poet
such as I.. Besides anybody can write loads of metaphors and call it poetry.
I am no cookie cutter poet my friend. I follow my own path despite its oft high costs. --Tyr


It looked good to me, but I freely admit I have no skill at poetry nor verse. ;)

Please do keep us informed as to the outcome tho!