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    Default A Halloween goodie for the kids

    In Desolation She Stands

    She stands in desolation
    her life a vile desecration
    dying victims stink her perfume
    sacrifice and pain fill up her room

    Hate and sin her sole wish
    madness sits in her left hand
    blackened blood covers each breast
    she tortures , her victims never rest

    Scars lace around her eyes
    dark hair flows with contempt
    pain invades with her loud cry
    she laughs as innocent children die

    Eyes have seen such misery
    ripping living bodies apart
    her lusting flesh the fatal lure
    in her web, death is the only cure

    Courageous victims fight back
    with fury at being so deceived
    she guts them with renewed delight
    as evil eyes watch the scene at night

    She stand desolate
    awaiting her nightly feast
    smell of rotten flesh in her teeth
    her foot-claws anchored in hell beneath

    She stands defiant
    lusting for putrid blood
    screams exciting her rancid ardor
    as she slashes deeper and harder

    Valiant heroes are her prey
    she that shuns light of bright day
    greater their fame more she glows
    bloody ripping apart sells her shows

    None stopped her blood lust
    every night-feast a new victim dies
    even courage lacks the deep power
    to defeat, to end forever her darkest hour

    She desires ever bigger feasts
    as she increases her lusting traps
    putrid blood and rotten flesh stain
    her songs of misery, torture and pain

    Engulfed in vile darkness eating
    great honor stands a chance of beating
    this desolation monster at its wicked game
    by refusing to ever again utter its vile name!



    Robert Lindley
    Nov, 16th, 1974

    How about a dark one? Long ago I did a few dozen of these, most were destroyed in fire. This was one of those that was not in that stolen group destroyed by a vengeful she-devil. And rightly so because she was the inspiration for much of it! Only fitting that she could not destroy this one..
    I hope you lovers of dark poetry may enjoy this write!
    Last edited by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot; 10-16-2015 at 08:19 AM.
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    He Was A Beast In A Dark Lair Unseen


    He was a beast in a dark lair unseen;
    Nights filled with depraved thoughts and deeds;
    Mouth burning with bile from his spleen
    Gatherer, hoarder,and planter of dark seeds!

    A raging beast in a silken cloak;
    Breaker of serenity's gentle and sweet mists;
    His captured females died with pretty necks broke
    With crossed out names on his already dead list!

    Late night, dark streets this villain cruised;
    With blood lusts burning in his tortured mind,
    Pretty victims slashed, beaten and bruised
    So careful to pick the prettiest he could find.

    Satanic power given, he could change forms quick;
    A blink and he could fly with his prey;
    This real power, evil fed was no parlor trick
    Such savage nights cutting his victims his play!

    Unlucky girls lived on to spawn his impish kids;
    The creatures that roam about Halloween night,
    Under his spell each one doing evil as he bids
    Racing into is lair before dawn's saving light!

    He was a beast in a dark lair unseen;
    Nights filled with depraved thoughts and deeds;
    Mouth burning with bile from his spleen
    Gatherer, hoarder,and planter of dark seeds!

    Robert J. Lindley, 10-18-2015

    This poem, written for an important contest(judge is an honest and published poet-well respected) took sole first place... --Tyr
    Last edited by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot; 10-24-2015 at 09:50 PM.
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    That was scary!

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    My daughter's latest poem involves Dia de los Muertos, the Mexican version of Halloween

    Dia de los Muertos

    The dead rise, their spirits are dancing
    They sing, they dance, they continue romancing
    Skeletons rattle with each step they take
    They make conversation while consuming skull cakes
    Don't mourn for us, it's no time to be sad
    Keep playing music, turn it up just a tad
    Our ancestors remembered on these special days
    With cakes frosted black and sweets served on trays
    La danza de los viejitos fills parts of the hall
    La calavera de azścar delights one and all
    Muerte nos sonrķe todos; todo puede hacer es devolverle la sonrisa
    The dead live among us, laughing at la caretas
    Party with us, embrace las calacas
    When la tumba comes calling, no one can escape us

    --Danielle M. 10-26-16

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    Quote Originally Posted by gabosaurus View Post
    My daughter's latest poem involves Dia de los Muertos, the Mexican version of Halloween

    Dia de los Muertos

    The dead rise, their spirits are dancing
    They sing, they dance, they continue romancing
    Skeletons rattle with each step they take
    They make conversation while consuming skull cakes
    Don't mourn for us, it's no time to be sad
    Keep playing music, turn it up just a tad
    Our ancestors remembered on these special days
    With cakes frosted black and sweets served on trays
    La danza de los viejitos fills parts of the hall
    La calavera de azścar delights one and all
    Muerte nos sonrķe todos; todo puede hacer es devolverle la sonrisa
    The dead live among us, laughing at la caretas
    Party with us, embrace las calacas
    When la tumba comes calling, no one can escape us

    --Danielle M. 10-26-16
    Actually, thats a very good poem. Remind her that in " end-rhyme " poetry to try to
    match pural words with plural words on the end rhyme
    as in take(singular) and cakes is (plural)

    She could have altered it this way.

    original verses
    Skeletons rattle with each step they take
    They make conversation while consuming skull cakes
    Skeletons rattle with each step they take
    They make conversation while consuming "a" skull cake........

    Additionally, this could be classed as a modern sonnet(not in ten syllable verses), as it is the required 14 verses, rhyme and presents a conclusion.

    Thus it should be presented this way in three quatrains with a closing couplet.
    see below -Tyr


    Dia de los Muertos

    The dead rise, their spirits are dancing
    They sing, they dance, they continue romancing
    Skeletons rattle with each step they take
    They make conversation while consuming skull cakes

    Don't mourn for us, it's no time to be sad
    Keep playing music, turn it up just a tad
    Our ancestors remembered on these special days
    With cakes frosted black and sweets served on trays

    La danza de los viejitos fills parts of the hall
    La calavera de azścar delights one and all
    Muerte nos sonrķe todos; todo puede hacer es devolverle la sonrisa
    The dead live among us, laughing at la caretas

    Party with us, embrace las calacas
    When la tumba comes calling, no one can escape us
    18 U.S. Code § 2381-Treason Whoever, owing allegiance to the United States, levies war against them or adheres to their enemies, giving them aid and comfort within the United States or elsewhere, is guilty of treason and shall suffer death, or shall be imprisoned not less than five years and fined under this title but not less than $10,000; and shall be incapable of holding any office under the United States.

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    Thank you, Tyr. For a novice poet, your advice is invaluable.
    I showed my daughter some of your poems this morning and she thought you were brilliant. She wanted to know why you weren't teaching literature someplace.

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