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    In Desolation She Stands

    She stands in desolation
    her life a vile desecration
    dying victims stink her perfume
    sacrifice and pain fill up her room

    Hate and sin her sole wish
    madness sits in her left hand
    blackened blood covers each breast
    she tortures , her victims never rest

    Scars lace around her eyes
    dark hair flows with contempt
    pain invades with her loud cry
    she laughs as innocent children die

    Eyes have seen such misery
    ripping living bodies apart
    her lusting flesh the fatal lure
    in her web, death is the only cure

    Courageous victims fight back
    with fury at being so deceived
    she guts them with renewed delight
    as evil eyes watch the scene at night

    She stand desolate
    awaiting her nightly feast
    smell of rotten flesh in her teeth
    her foot-claws anchored in hell beneath

    She stands defiant
    lusting for putrid blood
    screams exciting her rancid ardor
    as she slashes deeper and harder

    Valiant heroes are her prey
    she that shuns light of bright day
    greater their fame more she glows
    bloody ripping apart sells her shows

    None stopped her blood lust
    every night-feast a new victim dies
    even courage lacks the deep power
    to defeat, to end forever her darkest hour

    She desires ever bigger feasts
    as she increases her lusting traps
    putrid blood and rotten flesh stain
    her songs of misery, torture and pain

    Engulfed in vile darkness eating
    great honor stands a chance of beating
    this desolation monster at its wicked game
    by refusing to ever again utter its vile name!



    Robert Lindley
    Nov, 16th, 1974

    How about a dark one? Long ago I did a few dozen of these, most were destroyed in fire. This was one of those that was not in that stolen group destroyed by a vengeful she-devil. And rightly so because she was the inspiration for much of it! Only fitting that she could not destroy this one..
    I hope you lovers of dark poetry may enjoy this write!
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    He Was A Beast In A Dark Lair Unseen


    He was a beast in a dark lair unseen;
    Nights filled with depraved thoughts and deeds;
    Mouth burning with bile from his spleen
    Gatherer, hoarder,and planter of dark seeds!

    A raging beast in a silken cloak;
    Breaker of serenity's gentle and sweet mists;
    His captured females died with pretty necks broke
    With crossed out names on his already dead list!

    Late night, dark streets this villain cruised;
    With blood lusts burning in his tortured mind,
    Pretty victims slashed, beaten and bruised
    So careful to pick the prettiest he could find.

    Satanic power given, he could change forms quick;
    A blink and he could fly with his prey;
    This real power, evil fed was no parlor trick
    Such savage nights cutting his victims his play!

    Unlucky girls lived on to spawn his impish kids;
    The creatures that roam about Halloween night,
    Under his spell each one doing evil as he bids
    Racing into is lair before dawn's saving light!

    He was a beast in a dark lair unseen;
    Nights filled with depraved thoughts and deeds;
    Mouth burning with bile from his spleen
    Gatherer, hoarder,and planter of dark seeds!

    Robert J. Lindley, 10-18-2015

    This poem, written for an important contest(judge is an honest and published poet-well respected) took sole first place... --Tyr
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    That was scary!

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    My daughter's latest poem involves Dia de los Muertos, the Mexican version of Halloween

    Dia de los Muertos

    The dead rise, their spirits are dancing
    They sing, they dance, they continue romancing
    Skeletons rattle with each step they take
    They make conversation while consuming skull cakes
    Don't mourn for us, it's no time to be sad
    Keep playing music, turn it up just a tad
    Our ancestors remembered on these special days
    With cakes frosted black and sweets served on trays
    La danza de los viejitos fills parts of the hall
    La calavera de azścar delights one and all
    Muerte nos sonrķe todos; todo puede hacer es devolverle la sonrisa
    The dead live among us, laughing at la caretas
    Party with us, embrace las calacas
    When la tumba comes calling, no one can escape us

    --Danielle M. 10-26-16

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    Quote Originally Posted by gabosaurus View Post
    My daughter's latest poem involves Dia de los Muertos, the Mexican version of Halloween

    Dia de los Muertos

    The dead rise, their spirits are dancing
    They sing, they dance, they continue romancing
    Skeletons rattle with each step they take
    They make conversation while consuming skull cakes
    Don't mourn for us, it's no time to be sad
    Keep playing music, turn it up just a tad
    Our ancestors remembered on these special days
    With cakes frosted black and sweets served on trays
    La danza de los viejitos fills parts of the hall
    La calavera de azścar delights one and all
    Muerte nos sonrķe todos; todo puede hacer es devolverle la sonrisa
    The dead live among us, laughing at la caretas
    Party with us, embrace las calacas
    When la tumba comes calling, no one can escape us

    --Danielle M. 10-26-16
    Actually, thats a very good poem. Remind her that in " end-rhyme " poetry to try to
    match pural words with plural words on the end rhyme
    as in take(singular) and cakes is (plural)

    She could have altered it this way.

    original verses
    Skeletons rattle with each step they take
    They make conversation while consuming skull cakes
    Skeletons rattle with each step they take
    They make conversation while consuming "a" skull cake........

    Additionally, this could be classed as a modern sonnet(not in ten syllable verses), as it is the required 14 verses, rhyme and presents a conclusion.

    Thus it should be presented this way in three quatrains with a closing couplet.
    see below -Tyr


    Dia de los Muertos

    The dead rise, their spirits are dancing
    They sing, they dance, they continue romancing
    Skeletons rattle with each step they take
    They make conversation while consuming skull cakes

    Don't mourn for us, it's no time to be sad
    Keep playing music, turn it up just a tad
    Our ancestors remembered on these special days
    With cakes frosted black and sweets served on trays

    La danza de los viejitos fills parts of the hall
    La calavera de azścar delights one and all
    Muerte nos sonrķe todos; todo puede hacer es devolverle la sonrisa
    The dead live among us, laughing at la caretas

    Party with us, embrace las calacas
    When la tumba comes calling, no one can escape us
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    Thank you, Tyr. For a novice poet, your advice is invaluable.
    I showed my daughter some of your poems this morning and she thought you were brilliant. She wanted to know why you weren't teaching literature someplace.

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    Quote Originally Posted by gabosaurus View Post
    Thank you, Tyr. For a novice poet, your advice is invaluable.
    I showed my daughter some of your poems this morning and she thought you were brilliant. She wanted to know why you weren't teaching literature someplace.
    Why? Long story short- is I was not made to be a teacher in a classroom as my temperament does not fit.
    My rage explodes on people, damaging them,and thats not a good combination to put in a classroom full of kids.
    Do not let my now (somewhat controlled) calm demeanor here now fool you, as inside I still fight the battle every day , every damn hour.
    I write poetry to calm myself even more and just laugh at anybody that thinks its gay pr pansy to do so.
    Some of the greatest warriors in history were poets. Fact --and who better to write about death, battle, loss , pain etc than a man possessed with a true fighting spirit??
    There is nothing insecure about me, I conquered that lying beast long ago--I broke its freaking neck.

    No way could I teach in a classroom. I am just too volatile methinks.

    Later, will compile a list of truly great poets that your daughter should read and/or study.
    Give you the most important and first name now- Emily Dickinson!!
    By far the greatest female poet that ever lived.. She by far outranks many, many famous male poets ....Tyr

    Emily Dickinson
    1830–1886
    http://www.edickinson.org
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot View Post
    No way could I teach in a classroom. I am just too volatile methinks.
    You would be a great teacher, especially if all your students admired you as much as I admire you.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Perianne View Post
    You would be a great teacher, especially if all your students admired you as much as I admire you.
    Thanks much, give me some time to print about 500 copies of this and distribute it
    around town....

    Some of these clunkers in this town actually think that I am a mean old SOB. - --Tyr
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot View Post

    Later, will compile a list of truly great poets that your daughter should read and/or study.
    Give you the most important and first name now- Emily Dickinson!!
    By far the greatest female poet that ever lived.. She by far outranks many, many famous male poets ....Tyr


    Emily Dickinson
    1830–1886
    http://www.edickinson.org
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    Here is that list...


    My personal top fifty. She can not go wrong , reading and/or studying any or all of these.
    They are my short list--I have about 250 more, as minor poets I dearly love as well and
    many minor poets are just as good(some are even better) as the legendary ones that have all the fame....-Tyr

    Emily Dickinson
    Shelly
    Byron
    T.S. Eliot
    Emerson
    Blake
    Longfellow
    Poe
    Lowell
    Kipling
    William Wordsworth
    W. B. Yeats
    Tennyson
    Baudeliare
    Charlotte Bronte
    Dylan Thomas
    E.E. Cummings (he made T.S. Eliot a legend!)
    Edna ST Vincent Milay
    Elizabeth Barrett Browning
    Emily Bronte
    Ezra Pound
    Walt Whitman
    Robert Browning
    A. E. Housman
    Robert Louis Stevenson
    Shakespeare
    Robert Frost
    John Milton
    W.H. Auden
    John Donne
    Robert Graves
    Christopher Marlowe
    Wilfred Owens
    Rupert Brooke
    Siegfried Sassoon
    Geoffrey Chaucer
    Henry David Thoreau
    Thomas Hardy
    Robert William Service
    Stephen Crane
    Ben Johnson
    John Dryden
    Samuel Taylor Coleridge
    Algernon Charles Swinburne
    Thomas Gray
    Frank L. Stanton
    Sylvia Plath
    Pablo Neruda
    Dante
    Conrad Aiken
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    If not a teacher, at least you should be a guest lecturer. Have you ever attended a Poetry Slam?

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    Quote Originally Posted by gabosaurus View Post
    If not a teacher, at least you should be a guest lecturer. Have you ever attended a Poetry Slam?
    They didn't do poetry slams back in my day. Even if they had, I'd never participated being that I was then too solitary a creature. Always had a few close friends but never liked the crowds or leading a group. Sure , a great many gathered around me at clubs/bars but that was because they wanted to stay on my "good side', be it whatever little I had at the moment.
    Centuries ago(it now seems) I walked a path darkly, cutting my way as I wandered onward.
    Always just waiting to explode, because that release felt so damn infinitely sweet.
    Not knowing that my wild life and its hiding desperate soul was truly walking backward
    To find the me that my much wizened Fate demanded I was next to meet.-Tyr
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