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    Default New Poetry Form Tried... Than-Bauk

    Than-Bauk, a new poetry form I am now writing in for a contest.


    Hear My Sweet Dreams


    Hold your dreams tight!
    In your sight there
    Each night sleep fair.

    Dream on with glee!
    You hold me thus
    Lets be with care.

    Under pale blue moon
    Love blooms soon show
    in rooms quite fair.

    Velvet touch spreads!
    On soft beds slept
    Love weds our pair.

    I think your kiss
    Each I miss now
    A remised share.

    Hear my sweet dreams
    We ride streams down
    Fire steams our pair!

    Robert J. Lindley, 3-07-2016

    POETRY FORM- Than-Bauk, 4 syllables per verse, 3 verses per poem.
    I wrote mine as a double--never like to be restrained or told to follow limiting rules.
    Thus this one is ineligible for the contest I wrote it for.
    Too bad the sponsor decided he did not want to read longer poems. -Tyr

    You can stair case rhyme between the verses or staircase the verses individually....I dont care

    Stair cased verses

    O. O. O. a.
    O. O. a. O.
    O. a. O. b.

    O. O. O. b.
    O. O. b. O.
    O. b. O. c.

    O. O. O. c.
    O. O. c. O.
    O. c. O. etc.

    Non stair cased verses

    O. O. O. a.
    O. O. a. O.
    O. a. O. O.

    O. O. O. b.
    O. O. b. O.
    O. b. O. O.

    O. O. O. c.
    O. O. c. O.
    O. c. O. O.

    6. Make sure you do syllable count and grammar check

    Syllables Per Line:
    4 4 4 0 4 4 4 0 4 4 4 0 4 4 4 0 4 4 4 0 4 4 4
    Total # Syllables: 72
    Total # Lines: 23 (Including empty lines)
    Words with (syllables) counted programmatically: N/A
    Total # Words: 69
    Last edited by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot; 03-07-2016 at 07:44 PM.
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    Tyr, I am happy for you to have an outlet for your creativity. I think it's wonderful. It has to keep your mind sharp.

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