Political Satire: The Old Man of the Mountain

[Elessar]

Don't kill him yet. He seems to be kinda humorous. Let's see whereabouts he's going. You can always keel haul him later.

Aye, Mate....standing by.

[reedak]

....but you're taking the roundabout way to get your message across.

This is similar to many verdicts of real court cases. Lastly, thanks for your religious enlightenment.

[reedak]

It would be much simpler, preacher...If you opened by explaining what you are about to blabber about.

As with many well-known satires, you may ask the satirists what they "are about to blabber about".

Anyway, thanks for your honest and correct assessment of the verdict of the fictitious court case in my satire. You have pointed out the truth like that child in "The Emperor's New Clothes" by Hans Christen Andersen.

[reedak]

Don't kill him yet. He seems to be kinda humorous. Let's see whereabouts he's going. You can always keel haul him later.

A sobering advice that is as calm as the sea you are sailing in.

[reedak]

Aye, Mate....standing by.

Calm down, don't be trigger-happy.

[Gunny]

This is similar to many verdicts of real court cases. Lastly, thanks for your religious enlightenment.

You don't know who you are talking to. Which is kinda my point. You want to discuss, we can. I' won't get into a pissing contest with you over it. I don't want that sh*t anymore.

You want to fight with someone else here, just stay within the rules.

[GravyBoat]

This post is a satire and analogy of a true tribunal ruling. As it took 3 years for the tribunal to give a 497-page ruling on the real case, it's definitely not long-winded for me to summarize 497 pages into less than one page of words.

Lastly, you can continue to render unto Caesar what is his and thank God for not existing within the law of the Old Man of the Mountain.

It would help us if you'd give the background, making an analogy is fine for you, but then if you give the actual background behind it, this allows the reader a frame of reference, it gives your story more meaning.

[GravyBoat]

This is similar to many verdicts of real court cases. Lastly, thanks for your religious enlightenment.

But how is the reader supposed to know that unless you provide an actual case? As a conclusion to your story, you could provide the case from which you made your analogy. Your story is fine, but you need to work on it from a technical standpoint. I'm not some kind of editor, but I know that the story needs work, the narrative you're trying to show is lost to the reader, there's some sort of literary devices missing. Best wishes in your writing.

[reedak]

You don't know who you are talking to. Which is kinda my point.

You talk as though you are a big shot like Secretary of Defence Ashton Carter.

You want to fight with someone else here, just stay within the rules.

Hey dude, you have hit the nail on the head! It is precisely the attitude of the fictitious tribunal panel in my political satire.

[reedak]

It would help us if you'd give the background, making an analogy is fine for you, but then if you give the actual background behind it, this allows the reader a frame of reference, it gives your story more meaning.

I may eventually give the actual background behind my political satire, but meanwhile please comment on the "logic" of the fictitious verdict in the story.

[Gunny]

I may eventually give the actual background behind my political satire, but meanwhile please comment on the "logic" of the fictitious verdict in the story.

You need to understand your audience. Fictitious situations bounce off my head. And there is no logic to them. I can speak 2 and half languages, but when they made one up in boot camp for a test, I was lost.

Everything has rules. Be they physical or contrived. Without the rules, kind of hard to just ad lib. You need to put some parameters on your equation.

[Elessar]

Eh! Lost cause, this one.

Wants to keep the smoke and mirrors up and going!

[Gunny]

You talk as though you are a big shot like Secretary of Defence Ashton Carter.





Hey dude, you have hit the nail on the head! It is precisely the attitude of the fictitious tribunal panel in my political satire.

Got me all wrong, bubba. I'm the reckoning. Big shot? Not even close. My point was simply you come in here with a fictitious story and toss it out. I'm reading YOU, not your story. I'm usually the only staff member on when I'm on. That doesn't make me special. It makes me have a serious sleeping disorder.

Part of the proof is in your own words. You're comparing me to some spineless weasel politician? Just shows what you don't know. You probably got half the board falling out of their chairs with that one.

Know your audience. THEN talk.

[Gunny]

Eh! Lost cause, this one.

Wants to keep the smoke and mirrors up and going!

Let's see what he's got to say before you start dragging him behind the boat. I don't want people feeling unwelcome here.

Be nice if he'd get to the point though ....

[Gunny]

I've been biting my tongue on this one but you never know what a military dependent is going to come up with nor who they knew.

The Old Man of the Mountain was in NH. His face fell off a few years back. Think it was granite. My Little league Coach and DenMother were from NH. There 3 kids were in my Cub Scout den and on my LL team.

The Old Man of the Mountain never said a word.