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    Like Shadows In My Tired Mind

    Like shadows in my tired mind
    you danced in wisps of cool breeze.
    Your deep treasure I did find
    yet you left me with such ease.
    I had found thorns on your rose
    holes in your dancing shoes.
    Large cuts on your pretty toes
    dark truth in your bad news.

    Like shadows in my tired mind
    you danced in wisps of cool breeze.
    Your deep treasure I did find
    yet you left me with such ease.

    Such ease, heart finally shattered.
    To you- had it ever mattered?

    Robert J. Lindley, 10-21-2016

    Sonnet form- Lin 678, rhyme( ababcdcd,abab,ee)
    Eight verse stanza, rhyme ababcdcd, repeat first four verses as middle stanza abab, closing couple(ee) must be 8 syllables each, total syllable count to be 100.
    Word count to be either 87 or 88..
    Optional but better if it contains (8,4,2) that is 8 verses of seven syllables each, 4 verses of 8 syllables each, and two verses of 6 syllables each, as shown in this poem.
    See syllable count below..
    Enjoy the challenge of writing a sonnet in this form... trust me its not an easy task..

    Poem Syllable Counter Results
    Syllables Per Line: 7 8 7 7 7 6 7 6 0 7 8 7 7 0 8 8
    Total # Syllables: 100
    Total # Lines: 16 (Including empty lines)
    Words with (syllables) counted programmatically: N/A
    Total # Words: 87

    p.s.- Told you guys I love math... -Tyr
    Last edited by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot; 10-21-2016 at 09:59 AM.
    18 U.S. Code § 2381-Treason Whoever, owing allegiance to the United States, levies war against them or adheres to their enemies, giving them aid and comfort within the United States or elsewhere, is guilty of treason and shall suffer death, or shall be imprisoned not less than five years and fined under this title but not less than $10,000; and shall be incapable of holding any office under the United States.

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    New poem for collaboration with Aqua Marine, using my newly created sonnet form, Lin 678


    When Courage Faithfully Flies

    Where man's soul and brave heart meets
    hope sends great power there to save
    Life from death that often cheats
    the weak that could be so brave
    When faith filled prayer saves man
    truth comes forth and regains
    Happiness- life and love plans
    absent the dirty stains

    Where man's soul and brave heart meets
    hope sends great power there to save
    Life from death that often cheats
    the weak that could be so brave

    Look to heaven for its power
    Man knows not his last day or hour

    Poem Syllable Counter Results
    Syllables Per Line: 7 8 7 7 7 6 7 6 0 7 8 7 7 0 8 8
    Total # Syllables: 100
    Total # Lines: 16 (Including empty lines)
    Words with (syllables) counted programmatically:
    Total # Words: 88
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    My Poetic Quote
    The world now teeming with so many eager and dedicated poets, how shall one stand apart?
    Answer is simple, by honoring thy muse and never betraying thy true soul and giving heart.
    Robert J. Lindley, 10-22-2016
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    10-24-2016

    Final version--Ready to present later today at my poetry site..--Tyr


    New poem for collaboration with Aqua Marine, using my newly created sonnet form, Lin 678



    Final version--Ready to present.......

    When Courage Faithfully Flies

    Where man's soul and brave heart meets
    hope sends great power there to save
    Life from death that often cheats
    the weak that could be so brave
    When faith filled prayer saves man
    truth comes forth and regains
    Happiness- life and love plans
    absent the dirty stains

    Where man's soul and brave heart meets
    hope sends great power there to save
    Life from death that often cheats
    the weak that could be so brave

    Look to heaven for its power
    Man knows not his last day or hour

    *** *** ***

    Your loyal words of faith fly
    To heart that death so often cheats
    With loss that makes her soul sigh
    In painful hopeless heartbeats
    Could the weak again be brave
    When faith does not remain?
    Heaven's truth descends to save
    And cleanse sin's darkened stain.

    Your loyal words of faith fly
    To heart that life so often cheats
    With loss that makes her soul sigh
    In painful hopeless heartbeats

    Heart now so brave finds new power
    New hope gives courage in this hour.

    Collaboration(Double sonnets) Robert J. Lindley and Aqua Marine
    10/24/2016

    Note: Sonnet form used (new)-Lin 678
    Poem Syllable Counter Results
    ** Syllables Per Line: 7 8 7 7 7 6 7 6 0 7 8 7 7 0 8 8
    Total # Syllables: 100
    ** Syllables Per Line: 7 8 7 7 7 6 7 6 0 7 8 7 7 0 8 8
    Total # Syllables: 100

    Total- 7 8 7 7 7 6 7 6 0 7 8 7 7 0 8 8 *** 7 8 7 7 7 6 7 6 0 7 8 7 7 0 8 8
    Total # Syllables: 200
    88 + 84 = 172 words.
    Last edited by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot; 10-24-2016 at 10:13 AM.
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    That Silent Storm, No Mortal Man Can Stop

    Like a great storm crushing out a desperate sigh
    such is unstoppable force when death draws nigh.
    In myriad forms that dark angel tramps this world
    oblivious to sad pleas mankind may hurl.

    Death slays even the strong young or very weak old
    stopped not by vows, gems or great hordes of King's gold.
    That great sickle cuts anything known to mankind
    no hiding place can mortal man ever find.

    When that dearest life has flown by, old and quite gray
    expect a visit night or sunny bright day.
    Death cares not man nor beauty of songbirds on wing
    seeking naught but final death of everything.

    In your human soul, hold dear this treasure of life.
    For this world is dark-old and full of deadly strife.

    Robert J. Lindley, 10-26-2016
    ( New Form- Sonnet Lin 12/11)
    Rhyme aa, bb, cc, dd, ee, ff, gg
    Each stanza verses must by exact syllable count of 12,11, 12,11
    Final couplet must be syllable count of 12 on 12...


    Poem Syllable Counter Results
    Syllables Per Line: 12 11 12 11 0 12 11 12 11 0 12 11 12 11 0 12 12
    Total # Syllables: 162
    Total # Lines: 17 (Including empty lines)
    Words with (syllables) counted programmatically: N/A
    Total # Words: 126

    Note- Inspired this week by the death of a friend that occurred last Friday. Such a gentle sweet soul she was and always jolly and sincere when we met. She shall be deeply missed by all of us...
    18 U.S. Code § 2381-Treason Whoever, owing allegiance to the United States, levies war against them or adheres to their enemies, giving them aid and comfort within the United States or elsewhere, is guilty of treason and shall suffer death, or shall be imprisoned not less than five years and fined under this title but not less than $10,000; and shall be incapable of holding any office under the United States.

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