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    Default Thread For New Narrative Poems

    I have decided to start doing a few narrative poems, which is not my usual poetry and (gasp) are not rhymed, nor metered !
    This is the first written today...

    The Promised Release

    After she had finished hurting John, she saw bright stars.
    No, not the first time but as of hundreds times gone before.
    She had came again, wearing that sweet, sweet perfume,
    The kind that gave him hot flashes of thought.
    But what did he know at seventeen still a young boy,
    And she at twenty-five and a married woman?

    At age sixteen he changed a flat tire on her car, broken down roadside.
    She had flirted with him the entire time:
    asking personal questions that made him blush
    That next night, he had met her at a secluded park,
    She showed him the universe and those magic stars!
    Thus had chained him to her hot and dark comet!

    Now he could not resist any whim see proposed.
    Each time, the pain increased until he started weeping.
    It was a mental pain, not physical at all.
    For he really, truly, and deeply loved her,
    With pure love born from that sweet first encounter
    Now bitterest truth had invaded his fantasy rich world.

    Now he knew that even women could be monsters,
    That she used him to hurt her husband and to satisfy her dark side!
    Yet even with such mental pain and knowledge he could not resist her!
    As the months grew into years, his claws grew, his teeth did too.
    Seven years had crept by and on that dark night he vowed,
    To break that evil binding chain she had spun!

    Cool breeze blew as he drove to their secret spot.
    He waited, with his hate and love deeply entwined.
    No gun in his sweaty hands, no knife with which to cut!
    Just a big and beautiful red-rose to offer her.
    To ask her to be his wife, forever and ever!
    He asked the first moment after she had given the first kiss.

    She stepped back, as if to consider his request,
    then quickly and very brutally turned him down!
    Laughed her usual wicked laugh and reached into her purse,
    Next he saw a small pistol in her hand!
    Then he heard faint echoes of fireworks, six echoes to be exact.
    He fell to his knees, as if to beg her for her true love again!

    Then he saw red, huge red streams gushing out,
    Spilling upon that once sacred ground!
    In his anguished mind, he screamed out, "my god she has shot me"!
    Then as if reading his mind , she spoke with her dark and glee-filled voice
    Yes, I shot you and ended our game- well in truth, ended my game mind you.
    You should feel honored as the second sacrifice!


    Seven years ago to this day, I shot my first young lover, my first sacrifice
    The very next morning, did my flat tire trick to lure you in.
    I had been eyeing you for months awaiting that day,
    And you, like the first, could not keep your lusting eyes off of me.
    Now with your death, I need only the third to gain my release
    Release from the hidden beast that is my husband!

    In his last few moments on earth he asked, but why, why
    When I offered true love and to be your slave?
    She laughed and said, I need no slave! I AM ONE!
    My master promises my release upon the third sacrifice!
    And I will do anything to be rid of that foul and dark beast.
    To never have to endure again, his touch and his foul breath.

    John, you can now join Jason in that dark pit master promised.
    Chained together and eternally bitten and clawed by ravaging beasts
    No death release allowed, because HE delights in watching the show
    You never asked my husband's name, it is Lucifer,
    And I gave him my soul to gain this body, this magnificent beauty you craved.
    Know this before you go- your younger brother Jack is next!

    With those horrible words said to him, John heard another far off echoing shot ring out
    She slump forward by his side. Shot through her black and wicked heart
    From a mile away Jack had fired his rifle and had hit her heart dead center, as promised.
    Not knowing her second victim was his older brother!
    But instead, doing as requested to get his greatest wish granted,
    To be by far, the very best and most famous rifle shot in the entire world!

    Putting down the rifle he turned to ask- now that it is down, my first kill
    Will I always have this great gift?
    And Lucifer replied, Yes my new son, you will until your dying day.
    I have great plans for you and your future seven hundred kills!
    And in that future task, you will do splendidly, missing no innocent victims!
    Jack smiled, pondering how many years it would take to reach that mark!

    Robert J. Lindley,1-21-2017
    Poetry form- Narrative, non-metered verse

    Copyright © Robert Lindley | Year Posted 2017
    Last edited by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot; 01-21-2017 at 12:47 PM.
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    The Grizzly Old Cowboy's Night At The Saloon


    That wash-bin washed away tons of trail-dirt
    Many a pint of blood too said the old man
    He was lean and mean in his cowboy shirt
    Weather-beaten face and western sun's tan.
    Young man, hitch your belt tight tonight
    We afixin' to race forth to DryCreek's saloon
    With luck we'll have great fun and win a fight
    Before sad coyotes howl at the new moon.

    Young cowboy winked with a foolish grin
    Sure Pops, whatever you want to do
    You know I was born ready and all in
    I heard that saloon is a snake filled zoo.
    Last month, ole Tex got shot plum full of holes
    Died on that sweat-soaked sawdust floor
    I swear DryCreek jackals got no damn souls
    Took his boots, searched his body for more!

    That they did young man, so be lively tonight
    A cowboy has got to live by heart, wits and gun
    Just wait, those saloon gals are a pretty sight
    I bet my best saddle, we fixin' have some fun.
    Now strap on your six shooter and best shirt
    Those beauties will cry for young cowboy like you
    Each one giving you the eye if you dare to flirt
    I am mighty proud to see you get your due.

    Hearing loud gunfire from many a mile away
    Pops checked his six and rode on with a smile
    For five months he'd lived for this time to play
    Enduring far too many ranch, dust choking mile.
    Down main street they in great haste rode
    The young cowboy, admiring the much older man
    Walking in, to see how much whiskey they could hold
    Just being wild and crazy was the unwritten plan!

    No sooner limbered up than a fight started by the bar
    Some young fool got himself knife and carried out
    Damn thought Pops, that's gonna leave a wicked scar
    Young cowboy grinned and let out a booming shout.
    All went well until that beauty entered down the stairs
    Young cowboy, quick as greased lightning fell in love
    He then began dreaming they would soon be pairs
    He and that raven-haired queen from heaven above!

    Pops saw and knew there would be bad trouble soon
    For she belonged to one bad hombre named Laredo
    For her he'd fight anything and jump over the moon
    He was fast with a gun and one tough Texas tornado.
    Young cowboy knew too but did not care a whit
    His smitten heart overriding his western good sense
    He had now found true love and she was all of it
    For her he'd ride all night and break down any fence!

    When Laredo approached old Pops saw that gleam
    Fire in his blazing eyes and steam from his ears
    Thinking to save his own wild fantasy dream
    He tossed away any of his caution and fears.
    Young cowboy saw his hand moved lightning fast
    Had only enough time to reach for his pistol too
    This was it, some cowboy wasn't gonna live past
    Tonight's good fun, and would pay heavy dues!

    Two shots rang out, almost at the same time
    Each man dropped his gun, grabbed his chest
    Fair was this usual type of fight, not a crime
    Neither cowboy had proved to be the very best.
    Each fell forward, in a puddle of flowing red-blood
    And soon died upon that saw-dust saloon floor
    As coyotes wailed and cattle chewed their cud
    Neither would see the sun rise once more!

    Pops rode away, thinking what a damn shame
    That young man had a great future to live for
    He was strong and cocky with a good game
    Now gone, he'd ride this dusty trail no more.
    With that solemn thought he began to pray
    God, when my time comes, send me in quick
    Give me a speeding hot bullet to the chest
    I want no long drawn out time of being sick.

    Grant me this wish, we both know to be best!
    I too, have long lived by heart, wits and gun
    I now repent of this black heart in my chest
    I lived and loved, had me one mighty fine run.
    At ranch-house, he smelled the morning beans
    Looked he up at heaven and with smile he said
    Lord, I have on work-shirt and my favorite jeans
    Forget my wish, give me good day's ride instead!

    Robert J. Lindley,
    1-27-2017
    Form- Narrative

    Copyright © Robert Lindley | Year Posted 2017
    NOTE- WRITTEN TODAY.
    MAY ENTER THIS IN A CONTEST.
    If I review it , edit it and find it to then be worthy..-Tyr
    Last edited by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot; 01-27-2017 at 05:49 PM.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot View Post
    The Grizzly Old Cowboy's Night At The Saloon
    NOTE- WRITTEN TODAY.
    MAY ENTER THIS IN A CONTEST.
    If I review it , edit it and find it to then be worthy..-Tyr
    This is wonderful, Robert!
    You made me feeling the atmosphere and flavor.
    Indifferent alike to praise or blame
    Give heed, O Muse, but to the voice Divine
    Fearing not injury, nor seeking fame,
    Nor casting pearls to swine.
    (A.Pushkin)

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    Robert! You are multi faces as the Buddha.
    Indifferent alike to praise or blame
    Give heed, O Muse, but to the voice Divine
    Fearing not injury, nor seeking fame,
    Nor casting pearls to swine.
    (A.Pushkin)

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