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    Default the first kiss -

    I did not expect to be so-attracted to you. I did not expect feeling
    the gravity pull me towards you. when I accepted your invitation to dinner
    I did not feel the fates channeling me towards you. I felt no divine intervention
    calling me to your side.

    During dinner I talked too much because I had so many thoughts and to
    explain one little thing I think I have to provide background info.
    And the best part you soaked-up my words. Sometimes when i talk a lot
    people look exhausted but you seemed energized.

    And then I told you about wanting to kiss you and you smiled more.

    And then we were done - and I walked to the restroom eating mints the
    whole way there and the whole way back. Two meters from the door you caught
    me and said "I want what you have."


    My mind raced to possible meanings. I saw us on vacation together,
    laying closely tangled-up in a large hammock moving slowly with the
    tropical wind and in rhythm with the sea crashing onto the beach.

    "Oh. The mints!"
    I purposely held your hand tenderly as I dropped the mints into your
    palm. I was not cupping your hand so closely because of fear of
    dropping a mint onto the ground but I held your hand so precisely
    because I wanted your energy to measure. I must ensure I was
    right. You seemed to love it as you willingly and unflinchingly allowed my touch.


    And you took my arm and we walked but within fifteen steps I was confused
    and spinning and my mind was like a web browser with fifty open tabs each
    having a possible outcome for this date. Walking closely in the city, the Spielbank on the left and
    the highway on the right and feeling your energy close i decided I was done wondering.
    I decided I want to know if my reading-you was correct.

    I stopped you and opened you up to me, facing me and with strength
    and determination I pulled our bodies together and I
    gave you no choice but to submit to our first kiss but our lips moved as if we had
    rehearsed that kiss one hundred times. Your mouth moved with mine. Your
    tongue and my tongue actually embraced, slowly and purposefully I felt
    every centimeter slide beside mine and as if on cue we
    withdrew our and our lips took over. Then our teeth. Then
    you pushed your energy towards me - you not only welcomed me but you
    craved me. You were not done with my lips and i suspected
    you were caught off guard because you sent a little nervousness - not
    unlike some parts during dinner when we had a moment or when we spoke
    about something deep or personal that maybe you weren't prepared to speak of but
    you were excited I asked.


    And you kept kissing back. You pressed closer. Our tongues danced and
    our lips sucked and licked and our hands pawed and held tightly and closely
    in a contest of wills as if the one who stops first loses everything.
    You let me lead but you kept telling me with your body how right this felt for you and I
    welcomed you. There is a song which says "I did not know I was starving
    until I tasted you."

    That's where I was, I felt like I'd been nourished by you. I am not frantic. I am not panicked.
    I know when we see each other - even only twice a month if that's what it is - it will
    be good. It will be solid. This relationship promises goodness and within our kiss and our touch
    we just made fate our bitch.

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    Quote Originally Posted by dmp View Post
    I did not expect to be so-attracted to you. I did not expect feeling
    the gravity pull me towards you. when I accepted your invitation to dinner
    I did not feel the fates channeling me towards you. I felt no divine intervention
    calling me to your side.

    During dinner I talked too much because I had so many thoughts and to
    explain one little thing I think I have to provide background info.
    And the best part you soaked-up my words. Sometimes when i talk a lot
    people look exhausted but you seemed energized.

    And then I told you about wanting to kiss you and you smiled more.

    And then we were done - and I walked to the restroom eating mints the
    whole way there and the whole way back. Two meters from the door you caught
    me and said "I want what you have."


    My mind raced to possible meanings. I saw us on vacation together,
    laying closely tangled-up in a large hammock moving slowly with the
    tropical wind and in rhythm with the sea crashing onto the beach.

    "Oh. The mints!"
    I purposely held your hand tenderly as I dropped the mints into your
    palm. I was not cupping your hand so closely because of fear of
    dropping a mint onto the ground but I held your hand so precisely
    because I wanted your energy to measure. I must ensure I was
    right. You seemed to love it as you willingly and unflinchingly allowed my touch.


    And you took my arm and we walked but within fifteen steps I was confused
    and spinning and my mind was like a web browser with fifty open tabs each
    having a possible outcome for this date. Walking closely in the city, the Spielbank on the left and
    the highway on the right and feeling your energy close i decided I was done wondering.
    I decided I want to know if my reading-you was correct.

    I stopped you and opened you up to me, facing me and with strength
    and determination I pulled our bodies together and I
    gave you no choice but to submit to our first kiss but our lips moved as if we had
    rehearsed that kiss one hundred times. Your mouth moved with mine. Your
    tongue and my tongue actually embraced, slowly and purposefully I felt
    every centimeter slide beside mine and as if on cue we
    withdrew our and our lips took over. Then our teeth. Then
    you pushed your energy towards me - you not only welcomed me but you
    craved me. You were not done with my lips and i suspected
    you were caught off guard because you sent a little nervousness - not
    unlike some parts during dinner when we had a moment or when we spoke
    about something deep or personal that maybe you weren't prepared to speak of but
    you were excited I asked.


    And you kept kissing back. You pressed closer. Our tongues danced and
    our lips sucked and licked and our hands pawed and held tightly and closely
    in a contest of wills as if the one who stops first loses everything.
    You let me lead but you kept telling me with your body how right this felt for you and I
    welcomed you. There is a song which says "I did not know I was starving
    until I tasted you."

    That's where I was, I felt like I'd been nourished by you. I am not frantic. I am not panicked.
    I know when we see each other - even only twice a month if that's what it is - it will
    be good. It will be solid. This relationship promises goodness and within our kiss and our touch
    we just made fate our bitch.
    I find this to be very descriptive and well composed. Open and honest in its passion and conveying thoughts, impulses and first kiss with a new gal/future lover?
    I could write some of this in poetic form but not do so as you have done so very well here be it in novel or prose form... for that takes a far different kind of writing talent--one you certainly have my friend...

    Looking forward to seeing more and hope for a regular posting in this forum as your writing not only caught my eye but was highly praised by my beautiful, darling wife as well.
    Enough so that a sincere - bravo- is well deserved IMHO and thus is now so given...-TYR
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot View Post
    I find this to be very descriptive and well composed. Open and honest in its passion and conveying thoughts, impulses and first kiss with a new gal/future lover?I could write some of this in poetic form but not do so as you have done so very well here be it in novel or prose form... for that takes a far different kind of writing talent--one you certainly have my friend...Looking forward to seeing more and hope for a regular posting in this forum as your writing not only caught my eye but was highly praised by my beautiful, darling wife as well.Enough so that a sincere - bravo- is well deserved IMHO and thus is now so given...-TYR
    Not to mention that, like your poetry, T, it's kinda hot!

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    Y'all need help. Geez.

    I screwed my first kiss up. Harbringer of things to come. Been screwing up ever since.
    “When bad men combine, the good must associate; else they will fall, one by one, an unpitied sacrifice in a contemptible struggle.” Edumnd Burke

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    Thank you, Tyr!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Gunny View Post
    Y'all need help. Geez.

    I screwed my first kiss up. Harbringer of things to come. Been screwing up ever since.

    My first real (as in hot and full-bore) kiss with a beautiful older girl-led to other things.. I kinda got the whole enchilada first time out--and after that I kinda went crazy for a bit and could not stop thinking about it and her.
    One thing for sure is not only was she smoking hot but she was a magnificent kisser too!
    I could write a story about that first time and the over two dozen times we meet secretly after that to join as one...
    A summer I will never forget.. One that found me being exploited by a ravishing ,sexy beauty..
    Correction, --- me willingly exploited by a ravishing sexy beauty....---Tyr
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    write your story.



    You mentioned Poetry and stuff - I think with me is...poetry doesn't move me. Poetry seems like Shakespeare - it's just a language I cannot sync with.

    I think I may write the next story from the point of view of the woman. God - that'd be an incredible challenge.

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    Quote Originally Posted by dmp View Post
    write your story.



    You mentioned Poetry and stuff - I think with me is...poetry doesn't move me. Poetry seems like Shakespeare - it's just a language I cannot sync with.

    I think I may write the next story from the point of view of the woman. God - that'd be an incredible challenge.

    I wrote mine in poetry form, now already posted in the Creative Writing forum here. ... as I promised in pm..

    Link given above.. Written in (a rare for me to compose in)-- double sonnet form, the subject of my first real kiss(that lead to much, much more!).
    Based upon what really happened and how it affected me forever...
    Of course, poetic form used and board restrictions limited how graphic I could write, as did considerations of my current life with my wife that I so dearly love..
    Tis why your story and form used , is more enjoyable and far more hot (as my wife described it) when read my friend.-Tyr

    I wrote mine-- now waiting to read your promised second story, Darren..-Tyr
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