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    Default A New Sonnet Form I Created

    With Five Words, You Shattered The Paradise We Made

    With five words, you shattered the paradise we made
    I stood in shadows and cried, cried your name.
    Had it all, our love, just been a charade?
    With your angry words, I saw your sad game.

    In agony, I heard," I no longer love you"!
    I felt faint and saw jet black clouds rising.
    You cried and your sudden truth floored me too!
    You beg now, my firm no, found so shocking!

    Our magnificent love, you crushed like an egg shell
    Yet soon, you found new joy with your lover.
    I saw your deceit and that broke your spell.
    No more do your bold black lies have cover!

    Looking back, seeing Fate did me a great favor.
    All the more, paradise's new life, I now savor!

    Robert J. Lindley,
    7-6-2017
    (new sonnet form)
    Details - Lin Sonnet TTN , (Twelve, Ten, Nine, (12,10,9)

    Syllables Per Line: 12 10 10 10 0 12 10 10 10 0 12 10 10 10 0 12 12
    Total # Syllables: 150
    Total # Words: 126


    Note: Sonnet form , Lin Sonnet TTN..

    Three four verse stanzas and closing couplet in rhyme, every verse must be exactly 9 words,
    Each stanza, syllable count will be (12,10,10,10), with closing couplet (12,12) as shown above with my first poem written in this new form.
    Do the form perfectly and you achieve a total of 150 syllables, 126 words in 14 verses and alternate rhyme scheme of ( a-b-a-b, c-d-c-d, e-f-e-f, g-g )

    THE ADDED AND INSPIRING CHALLENGE IS IN THE RESTRICTION OF EACH VERSE BEING EXACTLY NINE WORDS, NO MORE , NO LESS.
    AND THE SYLLABLE COUNT AS SHOWN. (12,10,10,10) WITH A CLOSING COUPLET OF (12,12)
    IN THE SONNET FORMAT.
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    Powerful.

    Looks really complicated. Hope the poem wasn't about you.
    Last edited by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot; 07-11-2017 at 07:17 PM.
    If the freedom of speech is taken away
    then dumb and silent we may be led,
    like sheep to the slaughter.


    George Washington (1732-1799) First President of the USA.

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    Quote Originally Posted by SassyLady View Post
    Powerful.

    Looks really complicated. Hope the poem wasn't about you.
    Thanks.....
    ACTUALLY IT WAS ABOUT ME (OF COURSE, WITH A CERTAIN AMOUNT OF POETIC LEEWAY) BUT ALL THAT HAPPENED MANY DECADES AGO...
    Now, I am blessed beyond measure with my darling wife and family my friend.-TYR
    18 U.S. Code § 2381-Treason Whoever, owing allegiance to the United States, levies war against them or adheres to their enemies, giving them aid and comfort within the United States or elsewhere, is guilty of treason and shall suffer death, or shall be imprisoned not less than five years and fined under this title but not less than $10,000; and shall be incapable of holding any office under the United States.

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