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    Smile Presenting here to force myself to do the third and final part..

    Part one as is posted at my home poetry site

    Achilles, His Heart and Soul Were Mortal
    Robert J. Lindley, 8-04- 2018
    Rhyme (Mythology, Great Tales)

    Notes-
    1. Achilles*: - (Of Troy fame*)
    Achilles, in Greek mythology, son of the mortal Peleus, king of the Myrmidons, and the Nereid, or sea nymph, Thetis. Achilles was the bravest, handsomest, and greatest warrior of the army of Agamemnon in the Trojan War. According to Homer, Achilles was brought up by his mother at Phthia with his cousin and inseparable companion Patroclus. One of the non-Homeric tales of his childhood relates that Thetis dipped Achilles in the waters of the River Styx, by which means he became invulnerable, except for the part of his heel by which she held him—the proverbial “Achilles’ heel.”

    Read more: http://www.mythencyclopedia.com/Pa-P...#ixzz5NE789BPO
    2. (Achilles) father*: - Peleus - Peleus, a figure from Greek mythology, is best known as the father of the Greek hero Achilles* and the husband of the sea nymph Thetis. As a youth, Peleus was banished from his homeland after he killed one of his brothers. Peleus suffered misfortune everywhere he went and fled from two kingdoms during his life.
    Zeus* himself arranged for Peleus to marry Thetis. Zeus loved Thetis, but he decided to abandon his courtship when he learned that the fates had declared that Thetis's son would become more powerful than his father. After marrying Peleus, Thetis bore him a son named Achilles. She tried to make the infant immortal by holding him in fire to burn away his human weakness. Peleus, however, was horrified and stopped Thetis, leaving Achilles' heel vulnerable. Angered, Thetis abandoned her family and returned to the sea.

    nymph minor goddess of nature, usually represented as young and beautiful
    immortal able to live forever
    Peleus became king of Phthia, but he was overthrown by his enemies when Achilles left for the Trojan Warf. Thetis took pity on Peleus and brought him back to her sea cave, where they lived together forever.

    3.. (Achilles) mother*:- Thetis his mother, was the immortal Nereid Thetis, Thetis attempted to render her son Achilles invulnerable. In the well-known version, she dipped him in the River Styx, holding him by one heel, which remained vulnerable. In an early and less popular version of the story, Thetis anointed the boy in ambrosia and put him on top of a fire to burn away the mortal parts of his body. She was interrupted by Peleus and she abandoned both father and son in a rage, leaving his heel vulnerable. A nearly identical story is told by Plutarch, in his On Isis and Osiris, of the goddess Isis burning away the mortality of Prince Maneros of Byblos, son of Queen Astarte, and being likewise interrupted before completing the process. Later on in life, Achilles is killed by Paris when he is shot in his vulnerable spot, the heel. This is where the term "Achilles' heel" is derived from.

    4.Ares* : Ares is the Greek god of war. He is one of the Twelve Olympians, the son of Zeus and Hera.
    In Greek literature, he often represents the physical or violent and ...
    Symbols‎: ‎Sword‎, ‎spear‎, ‎shield‎, ‎helmet‎, ‎chariot‎, ...Parents‎: ‎Zeus‎ and ‎Hera

    5. Charon*:
    From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
    This article is about the mythological figure. For the moon of Pluto, see Charon (moon). For other uses, see Charon (disambiguation).

    Attic red-figure lekythos attributed to the Tymbos painter showing Charon welcoming a soul into his boat, c. 500-450 BC
    In Greek mythology, Charon or Kharon (/'k??r?n, -?n/; Greek Χ?ρων) is the ferryman of Hades who carries souls of the newly deceased across the rivers Styx and Acheron that divided the world of the living from the world of the dead. A coin to pay Charon for passage, usually an obolus or danake, was sometimes placed in or on the mouth of a dead person.[1] Some authors say that those who could not pay the fee, or those whose bodies were left unburied, had to wander the shores for one hundred years. In the catabasis mytheme, heroes – such as Aeneas, Dionysus, Heracles, Hermes, Odysseus, Orpheus, Pirithous, Psyche, Theseus and Sisyphus – journey to the underworld and return, still alive, conveyed by the boat of Charon.

    6. Styx*": From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
    "River Styx"
    The waters of one Styx in the Aroanian mountains
    In Greek mythology, Styx (/'st?ks/; Ancient Greek: Στ?ξ [stýk?s][citation needed]) is a deity and a river that forms the boundary between Earth and the Underworld, often called "Hades" which is also the name of its ruler. The rivers Styx, Phlegethon, Acheron, Lethe, and Cocytus supposedly all converge at the center of the underworld on a great marsh, which sometimes is also called the Styx. According to Herodotus, the river Styx originates near Feneos.[1] Styx is also a goddess with prehistoric roots in Greek mythology as a daughter of Tethys, after whom the river is named and because of whom it had miraculous powers.

    7. Hades*: In Greek mythology, Hades was regarded as the oldest son of Cronus and Rhea, although the last son regurgitated by his father.[2] He and his brothers Zeus and Poseidon defeated their father's generation of gods, the Titans, and claimed rulership over the cosmos. Hades received the underworld, Zeus the sky, and Poseidon the sea, with the solid earth—long the province of Gaia—available to all three concurrently. Hades was often portrayed with his three-headed guard dog Cerberus.

    The Etruscan god Aita and Roman gods Dis Pater and Orcus were eventually taken as equivalent to the Greek Hades and merged as Pluto, a Latinization of his euphemistic Greek name Plouton (Greek: Πλο?των Ploúton).[3]

    Achilles, His Heart and Soul Were Mortal
    Part One- (Years Before Troy)


    Achilles* woke, his slain foes calling out his name
    hearing merciless woes, his sharpen sword they blame
    looking at the heavens he saw the moon glowing blood red
    sending its message of truth about his victims now dead!

    Rising from night bed, screams from those slain still ringing
    he knowing much more torment they would be bringing
    there was darkness in his soul that, nothing could ever tame
    his father* had made death and destruction his only game!

    Small was the solace that, mortal men praised his deeds
    how in fiercest battles he makes his victims bleed
    dispatching each to Charon* for that final dark boat trip
    on river Styx, to Hades pain hides in each thirsty sip!

    As pitiful dead faces come through bloody halls
    louder and louder heard are their dark cursing calls
    those words become deep stabbing daggers and his heart is pained
    he realizes, worthless value of great fame he has gained!

    Asking mother Thetis* why she gave this black curse
    sincerely proclaiming that, nothing could be worse
    To Peleus* his father, he in tears begins to speak
    begging for mercy and the love he forever there seeks!

    He not knowing, Fate had demanded his half-god birth
    destiny's reasons hidden, he pondered life's worth
    asking why could not Apollo*, his suffering now ease
    not seeing, even mighty gods can not do as they please

    As silence grew louder, his soul already hurt
    he saw dying faces falling on bloodstained dirt
    As voices and bloody shadows sank back into stone wall
    his heart and soul's in memory, stored every cursing call!

    Seeing now, last vestiges of heavenly lights
    Achilles took time to remember all his fights
    soon begging for dawn, its soothing lights his pained soul relieved
    away washed curses of those that had cause to be aggrieved.

    Rising to meet bright sun and dawn's glistening beams
    he felt its deep gifting warmth and Hope that redeems
    Fate and Destiny granted this warrior another day
    on this mortal plane, for now, his half-god body would stay.

    Robert J. Lindley, 8-04- 2018
    Rhyme (Achilles, Mythology, Great Tales)

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    See More Detailed Notes Listed Above-
    1. Achilles*: - (Of Troy fame*)
    2. (Achilles) father*: - Peleus
    3.. (Achilles) mother*:- Thetis his mother, was the immortal Nereid Thetis,
    4.Ares* : Ares is the Greek god of war. He is one of the Twelve Olympians, the son of Zeus and Hera.
    5. Charon*: In Greek mythology, Charon or Kharon (/'k??r?n, -?n/; Greek ?????) is the ferryman of Hades who carries souls of the newly deceased across the rivers
    6. Styx*": "River Styx"
    The waters of one Styx in the Aroanian mountains
    In Greek mythology, Styx (/'st?ks/; Ancient Greek: St?? [stýk?s][citation needed]) is a deity and a river that forms the boundary between Earth and the Underworld, often called "Hades" which is also the name of its ruler. The rivers Styx, Phlegethon, Acheron, Lethe, and Cocytus supposedly all converge at the center of the underworld on a great marsh, which sometimes is also called the Styx.
    7. Hades*: In Greek mythology, Hades was regarded as the oldest son of Cronus and Rhea, Hades received the underworld, Zeus the sky, and Poseidon the sea, with the solid earth—long the province of Gaia—available to all three concurrently. Hades was often portrayed with his three-headed guard dog Cerberus.
    ** Modern interpretation Hades equals Hell..
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    Part two as is posted at my home poetry site

    Achilles, The Journey To Troy, Part Two

    Robert J. Lindley, 8-12-2018
    (Part Two) - The Journey To Troy



    Achilles, The Journey To Troy,
    (Part Two) of (Part One-titled, Achilles, His Heart and Soul Were Mortal)


    Woe! wretched horrors Olympic gods sent that day
    mighty king suffered, his treasure stolen away,
    power of Troy against very strongest of Grecian might
    testing magnificent force of fantastic Spartan fight!

    Saving proud Greek honor was the summoning call
    an arrogant king demanded Troy's suffering fall,
    swift as Hermes, to mighty warriors, messengers sent
    his request soon answered, as they came in flooding torrents.

    As Grecian phalanx were boarding its warring ships
    strong was the question upon the warriors lips,
    Achilles! Achilles! Will our fight he now we brave join
    he answering not to king's selfish whims or golden coins.

    Roaring loud happy cheers as his ship sails were seen
    warriors, certain victories plunders they'd glean,
    his godlike bearing seen forward, warship soft splashing prow
    for not even Troy's massive walls, could ever stop them now!

    Soon Troy's riches they would gather with bloody hands
    slaughter its haughty citizens, burn its rich lands,
    steal its power and gold, take its pretty women as slaves
    for its massive sins, cast its rabble into early graves!

    Sacrifices made to Ares they could not fail
    their gods had sent favoring winds filling their sails,
    Poseidon. rewarded faithful kings, had given their dues
    they sailed on with courage, pride of warriors and ships crews.

    Eager to land and fight battles for glory's sake
    to Olympic gods they prayed, their lives not to take,
    gift them courage and hone razor sharp their slashing sharp blades
    allow the sweet pleasures of victor's homecoming parades.

    Dawn's rays saw Achilles ship surging far ahead
    he had his prowess and dark blood-lust to be fed,
    in his heart he knowing, this great battle would be his last
    glory and fame taken, would forever set world aghast!

    As night fell, they knew new day's light, would blood-lust sate
    they each sought to placate dark master of their Fate,
    with prayers and incense to burning throughout dark fog of night
    each prepared for this, the greatest of all their warring fights!


    Robert J. Lindley, 8-12-2018
    (Part Two) - The Journey To Troy

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    Copyright © Robert Lindley | Year Posted 2018

    Part Three-- to be presented when finished....
    Please never think that writing is easy peasy .....-Tyr



    Edit-- 5-23-2020
    Part Three



    This three part poem on Achilles, was begun 8/4/2018, It has taken me a wee bit of a year to finish! Main reason is trying to condense the ending into such a short version of the original. As I never set out to attempt to copy the original. This poem was never abandoned-it just took this long to get the closing in. Parts one and two were much easier to write, tho' each one took several weeks to get completed. Yet the satisfaction when completing such as this is truly immense and a treasure to a poet to know they did their best. A year to compose a single poem is not often my way of writing but this one was just that important to me ! God bless...

    Achilles, Bloody Battles, Death's Black Hand As Was Fated
    Part Three, (the Conclusion)


    Dawn, bright rays fell upon Achilles and his band
    exiting ship, Greek sandals felt soft Trojan sands
    with mighty magnificent Greek pride in courageous hearts
    each seeking greater fame they knew would come as battle starts.

    Landing all around was mighty horde of Greek ships
    as falling Greek anchors through Trojan waters slip
    Achilles, full of joyous prospect of this contest's gifts
    gave warrior's brave words to his warriors spirits uplift.

    Near their shores, Trojan scouts blew horns, Greek first landing
    to Hector, Troy's greatest leader none withstanding
    rushing to meet fighters in many bloody battle fought
    until sun's disappearing rays flowing bloodshed did halt.

    As night, slowed removal of the fallen Greek dead
    even Achilles brave men, felt dawn's coming dread
    yet Olympic gods felt pride, how Greek warriors had died
    as Achilles and his men's glory filled their hearts with pride.

    For months, then years the Gods watched as great battles rage
    as Troy held out due to wisdom from its great sage
    and its massive fortified walls, warriors brave and true
    even cruelest of the gods gave Troy's warriors their dues.

    Day came that Achilles the great Prince Hector slew
    as had so many Greek warriors fallen too
    Fate, had not delivered Death's deepest goal, its blackest hand
    that of Achilles's sad end, greatest sorrow of his band.

    Achilles rose, saw dawn and knew it was his last
    a vision, he saw his ship sailing its black mast
    true to his warrior's brave heart, he felt not a grievous fear
    knowing his life would end, as Death its icy hold grew near!

    Fated, Death sent poison arrow into his heel
    finally greatest Greek hero did Death's hand feel
    was not this end, his legendary fame that sealed his name
    sacrifice that brought this warrior his everlasting fame?

    And the climax, that was to then seal Troy's sad doom
    as greater sacrifice must enter Death's new room
    for Gods decreed that thousands of Troy's citizens must die
    to honor this hero's death, defeat was the Gods's new cry.

    Achilles, Bloody Battles, Death's Black Hand As Was Fated
    (Part Three)
    Part Two-titled, 2. Achilles, The Journey To Troy
    Part One-titled, 1. His Heart and Soul Were Mortal

    Achilles, Bloody Battles, Death's Black Hand As Was Fated
    (Part Three) - Is the Conclusion..

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    edit :

    Links to all three parts

    Part One link
    https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/achi...mortal_1049429

    Part two link:
    https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/achi...rt_two_1051599

    Part three link:
    https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/achi...lusion_1182783


    Copyright © Robert Lindley | Year Posted 2019
    Last edited by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot; 05-23-2020 at 03:46 PM.
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    Finally! I have just today written the first four verses of the conclusion to my Achilles poem.
    This part is by far the hardest to conceive even how or where to start it and thus not have it far , far too long to match the other two parts in equal length.
    And my goal is for all three parts to be exact match in number of words, number of stanzas and number of syllable counts!
    Fantastically better if I can actually pull it off as I did with parts one and part two.
    So much harder but the reward will be so very much greater.
    I started a few months ago and ended up trashing the entire thing after having it about halfway completed.-Tyr
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