I have lost my mind. If found, please give it a snack and return it?
"I won't be wronged. I won't be insulted. I won't be laid a hand on. I don't do these things to other people, and I require the same of others"...John Wayne in "The Shootist"
A Deplorable!
As with many well-known satires, you may ask the satirists what they "are about to blabber about".
Anyway, thanks for your honest and correct assessment of the verdict of the fictitious court case in my satire. You have pointed out the truth like that child in "The Emperor's New Clothes" by Hans Christen Andersen.
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"The Palestinian/Israeli issue (more accurately, the conflict between Jews and Muslims) could never be resolved permanently." -- reedak
“When bad men combine, the good must associate; else they will fall, one by one, an unpitied sacrifice in a contemptible struggle.” Edumnd Burke
But how is the reader supposed to know that unless you provide an actual case? As a conclusion to your story, you could provide the case from which you made your analogy. Your story is fine, but you need to work on it from a technical standpoint. I'm not some kind of editor, but I know that the story needs work, the narrative you're trying to show is lost to the reader, there's some sort of literary devices missing. Best wishes in your writing.
"The Palestinian/Israeli issue (more accurately, the conflict between Jews and Muslims) could never be resolved permanently." -- reedak
"The Palestinian/Israeli issue (more accurately, the conflict between Jews and Muslims) could never be resolved permanently." -- reedak
You need to understand your audience. Fictitious situations bounce off my head. And there is no logic to them. I can speak 2 and half languages, but when they made one up in boot camp for a test, I was lost.
Everything has rules. Be they physical or contrived. Without the rules, kind of hard to just ad lib. You need to put some parameters on your equation.
“When bad men combine, the good must associate; else they will fall, one by one, an unpitied sacrifice in a contemptible struggle.” Edumnd Burke
Eh! Lost cause, this one.
Wants to keep the smoke and mirrors up and going!
I have lost my mind. If found, please give it a snack and return it?
"I won't be wronged. I won't be insulted. I won't be laid a hand on. I don't do these things to other people, and I require the same of others"...John Wayne in "The Shootist"
A Deplorable!
Got me all wrong, bubba. I'm the reckoning. Big shot? Not even close. My point was simply you come in here with a fictitious story and toss it out. I'm reading YOU, not your story. I'm usually the only staff member on when I'm on. That doesn't make me special. It makes me have a serious sleeping disorder.
Part of the proof is in your own words. You're comparing me to some spineless weasel politician? Just shows what you don't know. You probably got half the board falling out of their chairs with that one.
Know your audience. THEN talk.
“When bad men combine, the good must associate; else they will fall, one by one, an unpitied sacrifice in a contemptible struggle.” Edumnd Burke
“When bad men combine, the good must associate; else they will fall, one by one, an unpitied sacrifice in a contemptible struggle.” Edumnd Burke
I've been biting my tongue on this one but you never know what a military dependent is going to come up with nor who they knew.
The Old Man of the Mountain was in NH. His face fell off a few years back. Think it was granite. My Little league Coach and DenMother were from NH. There 3 kids were in my Cub Scout den and on my LL team.
The Old Man of the Mountain never said a word.
“When bad men combine, the good must associate; else they will fall, one by one, an unpitied sacrifice in a contemptible struggle.” Edumnd Burke