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    Quote Originally Posted by Abbey View Post
    Hi Robert!
    Can you explain why you sometimes like to use opposite imagery in your Haiku? Like snow and summer sun in one Haiku. You know I like to write these too, and I’m always looking to learn.

    First in my poem was --

    -------JUXTAPOSITION-------

    A very strong technique that is to take two distinct images and put them together in the poem. This is called the Juxtaposition Technique. The purpose of the technique is to express a certain relationship between the two images that lead to a certain realization or understanding.

    Accordingly, there are three types of relationships produced with the juxtaposition technique: similarity, contrast, and association. With similarity, the two juxtaposed images express a sameness with each other. For example, consider this poem by Buson:

    misty grasses,
    quiet waters:
    it’s evening

    Here, the “misty grasses” and the “quiet waters” play a similar, and reinforcing, role in contributing to the image of a calm, pleasant evening.

    With contrast, the two images juxtaposed express a stark difference, producing a sense of irony. For example, read this haiku by poet Yamaguchi Seishi:

    summer grass:
    the wheels of a locomotive
    come to a stop

    Here, we see the strong contrast between something natural (grass) and something unnatural (the locomotive). The irony here is that although the poem is written in haiku form, which traditionally glorifies nature, the focus of the poem shifts from nature to machine, which detracts from the beauty of the grass.

    Next , with association, one image relates to another in an unusual or enlightening way. Take, for instance, this poem by Issa:

    people scattered
    the leaves too scattered
    and spread

    Issa here associates the scattered people with the scattered leaves, perhaps alluding to the scene of a grave-site, with an array of tombs, and leaves scattered and spread atop these sites. Thus, the association provides the reader with a sense of desolation.


    In many of my haiku's, I use one, or two or even three of the main techniques in the same haiku...
    And always extremely important is -- IMAGERY...--Tyr


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    edit --

    needle, thread, old coat
    shimmering winter snow drifts
    summer sun, beach sand


    needle thread old coat, -- symbolizes--being bare ill equipped for the conditions or else life


    shimmering winter snow drifts -- symbolizes-- being in the elements- in a bad state although its beauty yet exists


    summer sun, beach sand -- symbolizes -- the contrasting imagery, the wish the person may be thinking- and the pleasure of that scene and warmth.


    That is the bare bones of it my friend.
    There is much more , in that poem. I will leave that to the reader to find-t o cipher out, to imagine--to seek.... . -Tyr
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    The Visit

    white stone, sad morning
    fresh mowed grass twixt the rows
    bright sun, soft cool breeze

    Robert J. Lindley, 6-10-2021
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    Dawn, A New Day And A Wonderful Start

    table, broken spoon
    breakfast on a sunny morn
    coffee, hot and black

    Robert J. Lindley, 6-16-2021
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    Quote Originally Posted by Tyr-Ziu Saxnot View Post
    Some think it is a men's cologne.....--Tyr
    Lol I respect your rythm and writing. It smells good to me. I don't know much but I like te rythm of Haiku it reminds me of a calming breeze or wind.

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    The Season And The Old Farm

    old garden, bare ground
    frost on the fallen mailbox
    breakfast, eggs, bacon

    Robert J. Lindley, 6-21-2021
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    Beneath Expanse, Glorious Earthen Skies

    cold pavement, late night
    moonlit trees, Heavenly glows
    old owl, frighten mouse

    Robert J. Lindley, 6-23-2021
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    Glimmering, Shimmering And Flaming Sweet

    her eyes, shining pools
    her kissing lips luscious red
    desert at high noon

    Robert J. Lindley, 6-24-2021
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    On A Glowing Bright Summer Day

    bright morn, wooden fence
    young colt, wide open meadow
    boy, red bicycle

    Robert J. Lindley, 6-26-2021
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    The Image, The Inner Reaches Of The Mind

    sandy land, windswept
    oasis, wet evergreen
    silent cat leapt

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    A Much Needed Rest, Delayed Production

    two old broken plows
    flowering meadow, bright morn
    farm-boy sleeping late

    Robert J. Lindley, 7-09--2021
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    So Very Peaceful On A Splendid April Morn

    little red wagon
    cool morn, kids, park playground full
    new flowers sprouting

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    Time, Beauty And America

    new pair baby shoes
    old weathered bomber jacket
    patriotic shirt

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    A HOKKU

    I
    Of Nature and man
    What tragedy, sorrows wrought!
    Wept, dawn cries its truth

    II
    Autumn colors pale
    White sidewalks heat mother earth
    Sad, winds and morn's glow

    III
    Earth and sky falter
    Rivers flood with flowing trash
    Blinded, mankind plays

    IV
    Beneath oceans dark
    Life its beauty imperiled
    Greed, man bows to gold

    R.J. LINDLEY
    7-18-2021
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    A Ravishing Beauty And The Price Paid

    party, bright red dress
    flowers and diamond necklace
    Sunday hangover

    R. J. Lindley, June 2nd, 1979
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    First posting, first example...--Tyr


    A reversing- interlinked and a triple set of 7,5,7


    The Hanging

    calm that sad morning, his death
    airy winds blew past
    a pause, a gasp, a short breath

    Robert J. Lindley, 7-23-2021

    *******

    The Aftermath

    swinging slow the dangling rope
    mindful of its load
    straight down, no inclining slope

    Robert J. Lindley, 7-23-2021

    *******

    No Small Deed, Death


    The huge crowd shuffling away
    the cheap thrill vanished
    to live so wild, someone pays

    Robert J. Lindley, 7-23-2021

    A new form, I have again been working on this month
    after abandoning it about 10 years ago....
    Syllable count 7-5-7-- interlinked, inter related --three separate poems'--
    with 1st and third verse rhyming in each poem...


    Copyright © Robert Lindley | Year Posted 2021

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    Edit- 8-01-2021



    Second posting........


    The Great Promise, The Sweet Hope

    morn's beauty, a new seed sprout
    illumination
    dawn's glow, whisper not a shout

    Robert J. Lindley, 8-01-2021

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    From The Fields A New Harvest

    high noon, soft radiant heat
    earth's titillation
    treasures set at mankind's feet

    Robert J. Lindley, 8-01-2021

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    Waiting For The Moon's Beauty



    red sunset, soft burnished rays
    waiting sensation
    harvest from another day

    Robert J. Lindley, 8-01-2021
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